Claudia Messelodi - haiku 3 & 4

This week I am posting two more of Claudia's haiku. Don't forget that if you would like to read more of her haiku, please visit EOTE

Industrious ants run

back and forth the kitchen tiles

mind the feet that pass

Tireless ant files float

up and down the door hinges

peek a boo and hide

Why I like these haiku

Industrious ants run 
Ants in the house? Surely not? Out! Out! Out! Alarm! Sorry, I leave ants alone in the garden but kill them if they come in the house. I liked the feeling of busyness and industry as the ants try to avoid the feet that could well end their lives.

Tireless ants file float  
I have to admit I couldn't work out why she used "float" here. I had visions initially of ants floating through the air! But on re-reading I realised she meant that the ant files seem to float because they move so smoothly as they march up and down. I liked the way she turned an observation into a playful thing with the last line.

Claudia Messelodi - haiku 1 & 2

This week I am featuring two of Claudia Messelodi's haiku. If you would like to read more of her poetry, please visit EOTE

Timid sunflowers

up and down the restless path

from dawn until dusk

Moved and deeply inspired

sitting at the bright window

put down thoughts in lines

Why I like these haiku

Timid sunflowers  

That's a real juxtaposition. I always think of sunflowers as bold and strong. The phrase "restless path" was intriguing and it made me think of the breeze rippling through the sunflower stalks. 

Moved and deeply inspired 
An excellent distillation of inspiration. Yes, we have to be moved by something to be inspired. Sitting at the bright window would be enough for me to become inspired. Lovely image of light without even mentioning light. And Put down thoughts in lines - perfect way of summing up how we write haiku!

A Haiku Journey by Kirsten Cliff

This week I am re-posting a piece from Kirsten's website about her journey through haiku. I found it a fascinating insight into why she writes. You can read the piece here


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Haiku by JulesPaige

 

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