Sun strong on my skin
Relaxes, warms my body.
Breeze is still cool
Monday, 31 October 2011
Monday, 24 October 2011
A fruity haiku by Freya Pickard
Green, round fruits, tartness
Inside, sweetened by sugar –
A gooseberry fool!
Monday, 17 October 2011
An elemental haiku by Freya Pickard
Clouds sailing eastwards
Driven by a high wind from
The sun’s daily death.
Monday, 10 October 2011
Claudia Messelodi - haiku 5 & 6
This week sees the last in Claudia's series of haiku. If you would like to read more of her poetry please visit EOTE
Why I like these haiku
Cicada's night songs
A sad piece. The juxtaposition of night bringing delight because of their song and the inference that the delight fades in the morning light is beautifully depicted.
Nimble kids play free
Very domesticated scene but with a hint of sadness in it too. The words she uses indicate that this should be a happy scene. But the reader is left wondering why mum just observes and doesn't join in.
Cicadas' night songs
bring delight to lonely souls
till the morning comes
Nimble kids play free
while their father mows the lawn
mum observes the scene
Why I like these haiku
Cicada's night songs
A sad piece. The juxtaposition of night bringing delight because of their song and the inference that the delight fades in the morning light is beautifully depicted.
Nimble kids play free
Very domesticated scene but with a hint of sadness in it too. The words she uses indicate that this should be a happy scene. But the reader is left wondering why mum just observes and doesn't join in.
Monday, 3 October 2011
Claudia Messelodi - haiku 3 & 4
This week I am posting two more of Claudia's haiku. Don't forget that if you would like to read more of her haiku, please visit EOTE
Why I like these haiku
Industrious ants run
Ants in the house? Surely not? Out! Out! Out! Alarm! Sorry, I leave ants alone in the garden but kill them if they come in the house. I liked the feeling of busyness and industry as the ants try to avoid the feet that could well end their lives.
Tireless ants file float
I have to admit I couldn't work out why she used "float" here. I had visions initially of ants floating through the air! But on re-reading I realised she meant that the ant files seem to float because they move so smoothly as they march up and down. I liked the way she turned an observation into a playful thing with the last line.
Industrious ants run
back and forth the kitchen tiles
mind the feet that pass
Tireless ant files float
up and down the door hinges
peek a boo and hide
Why I like these haiku
Industrious ants run
Ants in the house? Surely not? Out! Out! Out! Alarm! Sorry, I leave ants alone in the garden but kill them if they come in the house. I liked the feeling of busyness and industry as the ants try to avoid the feet that could well end their lives.
Tireless ants file float
I have to admit I couldn't work out why she used "float" here. I had visions initially of ants floating through the air! But on re-reading I realised she meant that the ant files seem to float because they move so smoothly as they march up and down. I liked the way she turned an observation into a playful thing with the last line.
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