17th April 2012

the flat brown winter
trees become dimensional
as their leaves unfurl

Freya Pickard 2012

January 24th

Bright carpet of trees
softly embroidered with vivid
swaying light citron leaves

Claudia Messelodi 

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What I like about this haiku is the unusual analogy. I normally think of a carpet as being at ground level eg a carpet of bluebells. Turning the canopy of trees into a carpet is different and gives the reader a sense of height as she looks down at the citron leaves. I liked the delicate nature of this carpet that the writer conveys by describing it as "softly embroidered". Freya